Raking his fingers through his hair, he paused at the temples. She was silent, eyes tight with increasing pain.
Filthy, really, where he’d sent her to finish but he couldn’t have her bleeding inside. And maybe she was a screamer. No one wanted to hear that.
His animals were circling, facing the doorway where the woman entered. He saw them from his bedroom window. He could see everything. He pulled a blanket over his head to shut out the light.
Tomorrow, that woman and whoever else was with her now had to go. He would make sure they were gone.
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18 thoughts on ““Vacancy” — Advent Ghosts 2013”
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Very nice! Way to turn that story on its head…
I was always taught that stable owner was such a kindly man. Who really knew him, eh? Such a great little character sketch. Good job! (And thanks for reading mine, Elizabeth.)
Thanks, John! Yeah, for some reason I never could buy into the idea that any man who would put a woman in labor in a barn was a particularly good guy. If he were a really good guy, we’d hear how he gave her his room. 🙂 (Don’t you just love this thing Loren’s got going?)
I love that twist, Elizabeth. What a way to upend the Advent narrative.
Good job! I enjoyed it.
Thanks, Ken! I really enjoyed yours as well. I appreciate you dropping by.
I found Vacancy intriguing and subtle. Congratulations, Elizabeth.
Thank you very much for your kind compliment and for dropping by to read. I love this growing tradition.
Good! 🙂 Thanks for reading.
Jesus, born to the poor in a barn. Offering the only free gift ever; eternal life. Luke 2:11.
Thanks for visiting, Leanne.
This rocks. Such a twist on the old story. Love it.
Thank you so much. I love the old story, and I love twists.
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